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THE BALLAD OF MR. AFTON

7 months ago

hey, simple post but im trying to get word out, would like a handful of people Very Soon be willing to just look over some writing of my script... im not looking for detailed critique but id like some 👍or👎 feedback on some writing very soon THANK YOU


Im looking for some basically audience testing with people i dont know as well , essentially pre-screening my writing style

for reference the whole script is written like these examples by character initials because that's the way renpy is coded for dialogue

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THANKS ❤️

Im just looking to see if jokes land or what comes off as charming or cringe etc. to know what i should tweak 🧐

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