What changes should I make to this storyboard (It's about 2/3 complete)

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This will not be the last time I use Charlie's Inferno sorry if this upsets you

Here BoyFren

he died sorry

Ive been hella dead but here's a traditional drawing of girlfriend

mspaints

how to b lazy: b me

(Looping the Rooms | Short UTAU Cover)

Youtube Mirror: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=quWd3UpiGH8

Some 40% Shits what I did for the mod of Friday Night Flashing / Internet Arcade

Here the mod ntework if you wanna follow them: https://x.com/OximG/status/2074246220931895453

what have I done