4 months ago

Hey, so I’ve been working on an original story recently, I’m new to writing and would like to maybe share some of the first few chapters (not all of it) to get people’s opinions and feedback for how I could improve on stuff. Would anyone be interested?


I’ll leave comments on the doc so you can point out typos, places where I could use some more descriptive words or examples of how I could rewrite something to have more show don’t tell or something, just anything that could help out. (I’d also like to have this be a bit of a comedy maybe. So advice on that will be helpful to)



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